The Voice Within My Writting

   My personality described from other persons would be energetic, occasional fast talker, quite, bouncy, shy, athletic, insane, etc. My description of myself is similar but I would probably say something along different lines. Although my personality is mostly conveyed through the one line/ phrase the is in different wordings each time but approximately the same is "rolling through my mind," or " thoughts piling up" and many other versions .
   
      My diction really doesn't add to my personality as I use some higher level words to describe or talk about something but not much form diction is considered throughout my blogs. In real life though I tend to use the word "presume" quite often as someone will ask a question and I'll say " I presume so..."  although for some reason I don't use if at all in my blogging/ writing. My sentence length on the other hand tends to be quite varied. Although in my last blog I used more of the occasional 1 word to 5 word sentences to mix up my typically useless lengthy sentences. For example in my last post I started of my second paragraph with "Cy" then that was the sentence adding an effect where the reader begins to churn the wheels.

 All these aspect combining together adds the effect energetic voice deeply involved in the post and adding mystery where there would typically be none. My diction and syntax for the beginning if the trimester and now has greatly improved as I am able to really look at my post and critique it saying maybe I could've done that better or this diction could've been more elevated. Although overall I have to agree with myself that I am able to better clearly define my voice and convey the plot of the post than in the beginning of the trimester were it looked as if it were a sloppy joe of words all smashed together. My incorporation of quotes adding to my voice is a life saver giving the reader a sense of what the character is feeling without summarizing it to 2 to 3 words.for example in my last post I used a quote from Kathleen Brooks author of Secret Santa : Bluegrass Brothers  where Tammy Fields talks about Secret Santa before they have a passionate kiss, "Santa was hiding some seriously ripped muscles under his red coat" and you were truly able to get the full image rather than if you were to summarize it ( Kathleen 664) . To have more of  an idea of a good way to add voice check out this video in voice.